Second draft of the argumentative essay

In Chile, there has always been a persistent tendency to think women are not equal to men in several aspects; therefore, most of Chilean people devalue the women’s rights. The same happens with the International Women’s Day, which is not properly celebrated and valued by the vast majority of the country.

Some people say International Women’s Day is properly celebrated, because commercial shops take advantage of this instance to put in lower prices women’s clothes, accessories, etc. And there are others who say it is properly celebrated because the government reminds us the women’s rights and that this field has to improve.

The most important and essential reason of why this day is not properly celebrated is because a great number of persons who you ask about this day, they do not even know when it is celebrated. If the government wants to make of this day a big event, they need to make sure that all of the citizens know about this international day. Moreover, this day is just other instance for shops to make big sales, so it is not anything else than a commercial concept.

All things considered, we cannot say that International Women’s Day has been celebrated in a correct way with all the value that it deserves. The national government should make a real effort and make women feel that they really deserve the principal character of the whole humanity.